IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

The diagram shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#electricity #power #station #information #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The graph explains
process
Add an article
the process
show examples
 of electricity production in a hydroelectric
power
Use synonyms
station
Use synonyms
.
Overall
Linking Words
, there are a number of stages, beginning with
water
Use synonyms
 from the river to reaching
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
power
Use synonyms
station
Use synonyms
.
Firstly
Linking Words
,
Correct article usage
the
show examples
water
Use synonyms
 river enters
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
a high-level reservoir,
while
Linking Words
there
Replace the word
their
show examples
 dam is opened and is closed at
nights
Fix the agreement mistake
night
show examples
. After that,
water
Use synonyms
 is passed by reversible
turbinus
Correct your spelling
turbines
turbine
 to the
power
Use synonyms
station
Use synonyms
 in order to generate electricity there. After, having
been
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
reached
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
power
Use synonyms
station
Use synonyms
water
Use synonyms
 is generated and
then
Linking Words
 gets provided to
national
Add an article
the national
show examples
 grid by
power
Use synonyms
 lines. Afterwards,
night
Correct article usage
the night
show examples
 process starts
by
Change preposition
with
show examples
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
 number of stages
firstly
Linking Words
 by releasing
water
Use synonyms
that is
Linking Words
 kept in a low-level reservoir. Continually,
water
Use synonyms
 flows back from reversible turbines to the
power
Use synonyms
station
Use synonyms
 and continues to go
till
Change preposition
to
show examples
 the dam after having finished
pumping
Correct article usage
the pumping
show examples
 stage.
Submitted by rakhimberganovashahnoza on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "firstly".
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words power, station, water with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • hydroelectric power station
  • reservoir
  • turbine
  • generate electricity
  • transmit
  • low-level reservoir
  • high-level reservoir
  • dam
  • cycle of electricity production
  • energy storage
  • flowing water
  • sustainability
What to do next:
Look at other essays: