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The given tables illustrate the percentages of pupils from England at one university who could speak languages other than English in the year of 2000 and 2010. Overall, it is clearly seen that, there were an increase in the proportion of British students who spoke two languages or more in 2010 compared to 2000.
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, the percentage of
bilingual speaking
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bilingual, speaking
 Spanish
were
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has been
had been
 always the highest. In 2010, 10% of people in university were able to speak no other language which was lower than the data of monolingual in 2000. The proportion of British students who could speak French witnessed a decrease
by
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of
 5% in the period of 10 years.
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, the percentage of bilingual who spoke German remained unchanged After a 10-year stage, Spanish speaker still took up the majority at 30% and 35% in 2000 and 2010 respectively.
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, bilingual pupils who had the ability to speak another language declined from 15% to 20%.
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, the percentage of trilingual had risen by 5% in 10 years.
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