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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

#people #choices
It is considered by many that we have a lot of options and alternatives in our life during
this
 era.I agree with the idea that the number of changes and selections which surrounded us is because of the Internet and modern globalization. On the one hand, the main reason why the Internet's influence on our selections is that it is very useful and vast on different topics. In my opinion, the Internet makes our lives easier than past by facilities which it provides for us during
this
 recent decades.
For example
, if we want to buy something online,
hence
 we discover the Internet and
Whsut
 do we
,
Accept space
,
 like a piece of cake!
Also
, there are a variety of possible options dramatized.
On the other hand
, another two reasons why I agree with
this
 idea is the speed of globalization increase during recent century significantly.
Firstly
, the development of transportation and transition which is occurring, has changed Our life and our environment considerably.
Secondly
, the proportion of fossil fuels, which consume during
last
 centuries rose greatly,
hence
 scientists could observe and invent something new by consuming new sources of energy remarkably. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I believe that the Internet and social development helps ourselves
also
 our society to choose what they want comfortably and effortlessly without any delay.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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