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Due to the advances in science, it is now possible for people to live 100 old or even longer. While some people think it is a good thing, others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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These days, many people are making the choice to go to university in order to improve their
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It is quite evident that one of the main aims of
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As a result
, the majority wants to enhance their future career prospects and university is one of the keys to do
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 candidate with better soft skills and work experience which
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 of success without it. To conclude, getting a well-paid job requires relevant
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People should make sure they attain the necessary skills or degrees before applying for a job in order to be sure
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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