Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? Discuss both options and give examples.

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Sharing with a domestic animal at home is becoming a common habit in today´s families,
otherwise
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, there are some people who believe it could cause health problems.In my opinion, there are studies who proved that they can provide security and love for children. Notwithstanding
caregivers
Suggestion
may have allergies. On one hand, people who have pets argue it helps as emotional and physical personality, domestic animals teach to children how to develop and care with a human being and
also
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with responsibilities.
For example
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, studies show the empathy the children get towards another human being, these studies have shown the 90% of the children who got the responsibilities of care a pet
shows
Suggestion
show
that can share with other people and are not violent. Having a pet could make you
happier
Suggestion
happy
and make your life better in an emotional way In the other hands, they argue that have been know pets can hurt the children and
also
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carry
disease making
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disease, making
children and causing bacteria and
parasitic
Suggestion
parasites
which can get
unhealthy life
Suggestion
an unhealthy life
of the children, studies made by the Colombian Clinic illustrate who is
75% probably
Suggestion
a 75 % probability
75 % probability
to get deadly disease cause the animal anatomy. In general sharing with animals
also
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taking the relevant care, shows that domestic animals have advantages and disvantages that impact on the children and the developments of them
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • companion
  • responsibility
  • care
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • social skills
  • transmit
  • diseases
  • allergies
  • safety risks
  • time
  • effort
  • money
  • mature
  • handle
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