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Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e.g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

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The chart provides data regarding the
car
 sales in 7 UK villages in 2013. Overall, it's clearly seen that the
number
 of Secondhand
car
 sales was higher than the
number
 of New
car
 sales in all villages. In Helmfirth both New and Secondhand
car
 sales were the highest among all villages, with 544 and 650 cars
accordingly
. In Maltham the numbers were a bit lower, with 455 of New cars and 611 of Secondhand cars. In Upperthong the difference between New and Secondhand cars was 79 cars. In Netherton and Netherthong the
number
 of New cars was 95 and 177 and the
number
 of Secondhand cars was 120 and 233 respectively. As in other villages, in Slaithwaite the
number
 of Secondhand cars was higher than the
number
 of New cars, with 300 and 232 respectively. Interestingly, the difference between New and Secondhand cars in
Longly
United States astronomer and aviation pioneer who invented the bolometer and contributed to the design of early aircraft (1834-1906)
Langley
 Farm was 3 cars, with 212 and 215
accordingly
.
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