Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The
consumism
the theory that an increasing consumption of goods is economically beneficial
consumerism
is not something new.
However
, in the modern world, it
has becoming
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is becoming
has become
something abstract and constant in our daily life.
This
can be explained by the power of the
technology
. It has given tools to boost the
advertisiments
a public promotion of some product or service
advertisement
power of
persuation
the act of persuading (or attempting to persuade); communication intended to induce belief or action
persuasion
perception
.
Also
, the fact that the
fastpaced
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fast paced
world environment
has affecting
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is affecting
was affecting
has affected
people's mental health.
Thus
, I strongly agree that nowadays people consume goods because they are lead to that, neither because they really need it nor wanted. Foremost,
as a result
of the
technology
, we have been a lot more exposed to
advertisiments
a public promotion of some product or service
advertisements
. Indeed, these advertisements have been improving their
persuation
the representation of what is perceived; basic component in the formation of a concept
perception
technics. In fact, they keep "following" you
trougth
a narrow depression (as in the earth or between ocean waves or in the ocean bed)
trough
taught
your social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
platforms. With the use of smartphones,
for instance
, you
are caught
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have caught
are catching
catch
the attention for products that you even did not know you need it. Indeed, as soon as we check any of our social media profiles there it is that product we just had talked to our friend about it.
Furtermore
in addition
Furthermore
, still
realated
being connected either logically or causally or by shared characteristics
related
relate
elated
to
technology
, our way of
go shopping
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go, shopping
has been changing. Having
acces
the right to enter
access
to websites
such
as Amazon, and a variety of
supermarkets
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supermarket
plataforms
a raised horizontal surface
platforms
, we do not
need leave our
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need to leave our
homes anymore to buy anything.
This
facility is making our time of decision shorter, which can be dangerous and make impulsive consumers buy products that they did not need. Whereas, not so long time ago,
this
time of decision was longer as we need to go outside, visit more than one place to search for better prices. These whole changes brought by the advancement of the
technology
has
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have also been making
has also been making
have also made
also
beeing making people feel more
streesed
suffering severe physical strain or distress
stressed
as well as depressed.
Accordingly several
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Accordingly, several
studies conducted by universities from Vancouver, in the near future, depression will be the
second
reason of deaths in the entire world. Scientists
also
show that for many people with mental health problems, to buy is a way
of
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to
release it.
Consequently
, these consumers will
by
obtain by purchase; acquire by means of a financial transaction
buy
because it is for them a way
for
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of
to
in
fix
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fixing
the problem, making them feel happier. In conclusion, I greatly agree that the power of the advertising is the main reason why people buy certain products which they usually did not need it.
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