You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, describe the training course you want to do explain what the company could do to help you say how the course will be useful for your job

Dear Sir or Madam, I am Tina working
at
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the department of marketing. I am writing to apply
a
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for a

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training
course
which I saw in
advertisement
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the advertisement

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. I would like to explain detailed information in
this
letter.
To begin
with,
this
training
course
that I am interested
at
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is to provide trainees
knowledge
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about the current international trends within different commercial businesses.
Besides
, it would demonstrate new marketing too Is based on your target segment.
In addition
to it, I would like to apply for
a
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financier
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financial

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assistance from
company
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the company

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to promote my skills. As one of the
company
's programs, everyone can submit one application
of
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for

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individual learning funds.
Hence
, I hope our
company
can accept my application for
this
training
course
. As working in the marketing department, I should keep updating the relevant information of business trends. It is beneficial for me, as a part of marketing team members to decide our marketing strategies.
Moreover
, It will provide me
a
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guideline of potential negative impacts which came from our competitors. To conclude, I certainly want to participate in
this
training
course
. I hope our
company
can agree with my plan based on these benefits.
Your
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Sincerely, Tina
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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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