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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People have different views regarding the major that students should
study
 at universities should be compulsory or by their own choice. I personally think it would be more beneficial to let students make the decision by their own willingness. Some people may feel studying in a particular field have more advantages for both society and individuals. Having more job opportunities, better salaries and be more respected in the community can be some reasons for them to address
this
 solution. By choosing subjects that have attracted more attention in society,
one
 may guarantee the future for himself. People
also
 argue that
this
 compulsion may help to decrease the unemployment rate as government make students to
study
 majors which are more likely to have job vacancies. I think forcing people to
study
 subjects that they don’t like, would not be a good idea necessarily.
First
 of all, not all the people is talented in science and technology areas. Student’s potential should
also
 be considered when
one
 subject is chosen for them.
For example
, maybe in a family
one
 of the children is good at math and another
one
 is gifted in art. The authority cannot force both to
study
 engineering as it will be more helpful for the economy.
In addition
, people are likely to be more successful when they
study
 in their desired realm, as they are more willing to put time and energy there.
Also
 by giving people choosing right for their life, they will usually try more as they feel more responsible. Eventually, a successful singer would be more beneficial to society and his own rather than a disappointed dentist. In conclusion, I suggest it is better to give the chance to student to choose their own university majors as forcing them would not be a reasonable idea.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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