Some people say international sports events help in world peace. Do you agree or disagree?

Peaceful environment is considered as v
ital achievement
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a vital achievement
of mankind and states itself. Peace is seen as societal friendship between people. As stress m
ake
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makes
h
uman kind
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
humankind
sick and feeble, it
also
wreaks havoc in s
tates.
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the states
That is
why nations try to make peace in all cases. Most people reckon that international sport games play v
ast role
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a vast role
in achieving world peace.
This
is inevitable fact that sharing same thing makes people closer and organizing a lot of various kinds of international sports make people travelling many countries and sharing a lot of s
ame things.
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the same things
They acquaint with many people in different nationality and be friends with them.
As a result
friendship leads to peaceful aura in s
tates.
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the states
Another goal for p
eaceful environment
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the peaceful environment
between nations by international sports games is that it unites a lot of different kinds of nationality by using s
ame instructions
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the same instructions
for the game they play with. They u
nites
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unite
are uniting
have united
in one hand and fight together. As well as sportsmen come to the countries to play their role
,
Accept space
,
their bystanders
also
travel to support their own team.
This
also
helps improving relations between people in different nations

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