Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? Discuss both options and give examples.

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issue has caused wide public concern about keeping
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would have a good environment for kids to grow up.
On the contrary
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someone believed that may affect children safe and their health problems. In my opinion
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children receive substantive psychological benefits through having pets.
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of all
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keeping a pet can I still a sense of responsibility in those children. Parents can arrange for their kids to take care their pets like feeding and grooming for their pets.
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it is understood by most people that children's resistance is not high and it is lead to easier infect different kind of virus
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the
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up to the immediate present; most recent or most up-to-date
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statistics show children who played with their dogs regularly at birth had a 13% lower risk of developing asthma in childhood than their peers.
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some parents want their children can have a healthy life
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they had abandoned their pets.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • companion
  • responsibility
  • care
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • social skills
  • transmit
  • diseases
  • allergies
  • safety risks
  • time
  • effort
  • money
  • mature
  • handle
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