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Many students take part-time while studying in university is this good or bad idea.

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Thesedays
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These days
,
lot
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lots
 of students take temporary jobs while they are pursuing university studies. In my
perceptive
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perception
 it is beneficial for their career development.
However
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, there are numerous advantages for the part-time jobs in between their studies.
To begin
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 with, they gain relevant experience during their studies. Once, they complete their education it will help them to get a
job
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.
For example
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, when a company selects a candidate for their vacancy
firstly
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, they check the person has the experience. If he is a beginner his resume is relegated due to lack of exposure in the particular field. Students can earn money from the
job
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. As you know that, most of the students borrow money the bank to finish their studies. So that, they can reduce
burden
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a burden
 on their parents.
In contrast
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, if the students not willing to do the temporary jobs, once the start to search for a
job
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 they will be in trouble in terms of reference and the experience.
Moreover
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, all the companies recruit the as a
trainees
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trainee
 they need to prove their talent and skills because there is a huge competition among them to get the promotion To conclude, students who do the part-time jobs will help their career development and
also
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 easy to get the jobs completion of their studies. So in my opinion they should the part-time
job
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 during their university studies.

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