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It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both side and give your opinion.

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Many people have many perspectives about where to live.
Although
 some might say that living in urban is more convenient, others think that there are too many chaotic and
pollution
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polluted
.
This
 essay will explore
advantages
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the advantages
 and disadvantages of both places and give an opinion at the end. Nowadays, lots of major cities are facing with congested traffic because most of residents are dependent on their private car and commute to work where
is their workplace
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their workplace is
 located.
Therefore
, there
are
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is
 a lot of air pollution in the heart of the town and not only
this but
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this, but
also
 too much noisy, especially during rush hour.
However
, somebody
choose
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chooses
 to rent or buy a condominium which is located in the right
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 of cities as
this
 place is nearby their company and there are plenty of the convenient shopping malls and entertainment places,
such
 as a cinema, a restaurant, a fitness
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 and so on.
In contrast
, some families decide to live on the outskirts as it is
more quiet
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quieter
 and more fresh air, so they can have a better quality of living than stay
inside
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in
 the city which is
fully
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full
 of crowds.
On the other hand
, these groups may have to battle through the traffic problems as they need to travel to work. To sum up, there are pros and cons between living in an urban and countryside. People have many options to decide whether which place is
suite
move so that an opening or passage is obstructed; make shut
shut
 them. In my view, I think living in the city is the best option as we can go to work easily.
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