Modern technology is now very common in most work places. How do you think this has changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

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Technology
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has developed rapidly over the
last
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few decades. While it has brought numerous benefits to
work environment
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the work environment
, some people argue that there are more significant drawbacks of relying too much on
technology
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. With the coming of modern
technology
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can help to increase productivity.
Firstly
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, thanks to modern
technology
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, in many
industries
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industry
people can produce much more than people did in before.
For instance
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,
agriculture
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agriculture, technology
technology
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helps
framers
a person who operates a farm
farmers
to harvest a lot in a short period.
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, companies can reduce the cost of
production process
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the production process
production processes
. Through using industrial robots, companies can produce the stuff
fast
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faster
and
also
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can reduce
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
cost.
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, machines and robots can work in dangerous environment
instead
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of people.
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, undoubtedly, advanced
technology
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has several negative impacts on people.
Firstly
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, many jobs
were lost
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was lost
.
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, people simply order their food or check in their boarding pass through using a digital kiosk rather than going to the counter to meet
staff
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the staff
. Another example is, as many companies use
automatic system
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the automatic system
in their production process, so a considerable number of factory workers lost their job. Machines have replaced people’s
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
in
service
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the service
and manufacturing industries.
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, the danger of cyber security has increased. As information
technology
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has developed rapidly, there appeared hacking system which can threat to company’s important information. To conclude, in my opinion,
although
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modern
technology
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has brought lots of advantages to people work efficiently, it
also
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has induced some substantial problems to people.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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