Many schools these days have problems with poor student behaviour. Why do you think these problems occur? What could be done to tackle these problems?

In these days we cannot refuse that there are many schools which are facing some difficulties with impecunious learners character.
This
essay will look at the reasons which are the exact answer to the question of why these problems occur and propose to find some solutions for it.
Firstly
, the one of the main reasons is that, obviously, differing from their classmates or friends by financial side.
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many attempts, poor parents are not able to provide their children with needs like others and
this
causes to retiring or separating from others. That's why the relationship between pupils will break. In fact, the average monthly expense of a pupil who is rich parent's child is 600.000 sums,
additionally
this
means one worthless father's salary. In order to solve
this
problem school administration have to organize a kind of programs that avoid space among wealth and helpless students.
Moreover
, another factor is beginning work from early age
instead
of learning science. Because most of young children start working to help their family while studying in school. Not only work, but
also
in order to earn more money they do not attend in each lesson. Of course,
this
process may repeat more and more times. For evidence, 75% of teenagers stop their studying because of the aim of more money. Supporting indigent adults by financial side is the main key to reduce
this
process.
Furthermore
, if the government controls the attracting little generation to work during their education, they would understand the benefits of studying. In conclusion, despite of that problems which are occurring with destitute pupil's attitude in school seem like a simple, we have to think carefully before doing something, because young children are our future.
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