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Some universities now offer their courses on the internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development?

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It is true that online courses are suggested by universities for everyone who wants to study online. I think there are both benefits and drawbacks. On the one hand, online courses have positive impacts for everyone who wants to join in virtual classes. It would be affordable for them wherever they participate in online classes. Because it does not need to commute from houses or workplaces to
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the University
.
First
, it could help to save money and avoids the wasting of time.
Second
, they would not wait in traffic congestion.
In addition
, these types of classes could be
saved
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saved, then
then
 the student can review them many times.
On the other hand
, virtual classes have some negative points. Most of the time, there are some problems with the internet and equipment.
For instance
, in Iran sometimes the internet is down or computers crash.
Furthermore
, the students might miss the chance of joining in the groups of pupils which could be an effective way to teach them team works and motivate them to be more responsible. Other than that, if the students participate in physical universities, they might give better feedback from their teachers which could improve their performance and encourage them to study diligently. To conclude, internet-based learning has both negative and positive impact on people who want to join it.
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