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During the last twenty years, the assessment of students has undergone a major transformation. Many educational institutions have shifted their focus from traditional examination towards a variety of innovative assessment techniques, as they believe traditional examination results are not often true to student’s ability. To what extent do you agree with this belief? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Education and examination always go hand-in-hand. As education
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keeps
 experimenting with their curriculums over the period of time.
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 twenty years, There has been
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a drastic change
 with regards to
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student
students'
student's
 assessment. Many universities and colleges have moved from traditional examinations to creative presentations keeping the student's ability into consideration. In my opinion, I completely agree with the argument mentioned above.
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, Now a days Education
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 believes in providing practical experience. Students having practical examination will get a hands-on experience and a taste of how an outside world looks like. Once they graduate from the institution they will have real-time
knowledge
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 and can deal with the situation more easily and practically as compared to the book
knowledge
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, A researcher from the Oxford University states that students who have performed well in presentations are able to get jobs quickly than students who have appeared
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in
 paper based.
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the education system
education systems
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 should
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support, practical
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 over theory
knowledge
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, Education
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 has been totally dependent on softwares and technology. Since the era of 2000s, Schools and collages collaborates with software companies to record their videos while teaching and upload
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 the server so that students can refer to it whenever they needed.
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, A researcher from the Harvard University has
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 that students referring to
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the recordings
 after class has got 59% positive results in recent years. Overall, Using Softwares and technology has proved healthy education learning. To conclude, from the
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 twenty years experimenting with softwares and providing practical
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 during examination has transformed educational
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 completely.
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 proven, it is
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a positive and creative side
 of teaching students.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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