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The money spent by hovernments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree .

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It is sometimes argued that governments in some countries are wasting large amount of money on space exploration programmes rather than allocating these funds to public services. I completely agree with
this
 view.
To begin
 with, there are several reasons why public services are should not to be funded.
Firstly
, we have a limited resources to spend, so if we will spend money on public services, we will just improve what we have
instead
 of discovering new sources.
Secondly
, population of Earth is growing through the years and if we do not find new planet as a source of what we need, we would experience a famine.
Secondly
, it takes time to train workers who are offering services like teachers, doctors, police and etc.
Furthermore
, public servants do jobs, that has positive impacts on society,
however they
Accept comma addition
however, they
 use things which are endless. On the other hand, I believe that governments should carry on spending money the space missions, rather than the on vital public services. So we need to discover other planets and search there for essential things without of which, we can not able to live. For instance, oxygen to breathe, water to drink and of course food eat. And, if we find such planet where, is acceptable to survive for humans, so we can move the part of our population there and be a multi planetar species. Also, we know that there are plenty of galaxies and planet inside of them, so at least in one of the all planets , there must be another minded species like humans. Finally, the space is a full of various planet where might be the another energy source. In coclusion, I believe that authorities of the country should continue funding space projects which will benefit us all.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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