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It is neither possible nor useful for a country to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There has been a difference of opinions regarding the accessibility of tertiary education to the majority of young people. In my view, dispensing university educational services on
such
 a large scale brings about no practical values to society, and
also
, it is rather unfeasible to carry out
this
 policy.
First
, widespread entry into university does not seem really useful to a country since the government need to take the needs of both the youth and the economy into consideration. In many countries, especially Germany, vocational training has gained more popularity among young people because it enhances employment opportunities as well as job security upon completion.
Furthermore
, if everyone could gain admittance to college, it would lead to imbalances in the workforce that would greatly damage economic structure. It is because there is little chance that university graduates would choose blue-collar jobs
such
 as working in factories.
Second
, I think that it is impossible to provide almost all young people with access to tertiary education. In Vietnam, the demand for entering college never ceases to grow at a rapid rate.
This
 puts the government in a dilemma of whether they should risk allocating their resources and
therefore
 face the possibility of bankruptcy due to exorbitant education costs in many financially independent universities, like Foreign Trade University or National Economics University. On top of that, it is simply unrealistic for universities to accommodate
such
 a suddenly increased number of students on campus, not to mention the fact that most departments are currently short-staffed. In conclusion, I strongly oppose the idea of supplying entry to a high proportion of young people owing to the presented arguments above.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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