Over consuming sugar is unhealthy. Some people think that governments should take responsibility to control it. Others think that individuals should take responsibility for sugar intake. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no doubt that the most common disease these days is diabetes. Using

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and

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products

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contributes to an increase in the number of diabetics.

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, some think that the

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should take action to

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consuming

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,

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others believe that the

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consumer should

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control their usage of

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. In my opinion, both the

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and the

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should work together to control

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. There are many ways that the

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can control

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. One of them, the

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can increase the customs fee on

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and

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products

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;

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, the

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and

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prices will rise. That will

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to a decrease in consuming

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. The other way is to increase health awareness about the harmful effects of overusing

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in our diet.

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, increasing the number of advertisements on

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and street about damages caused by

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or

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some medical

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where the kids who are the most consumed

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.

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,

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have to keep an eye on their

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consumption. They can decrease their usage in many different ways.

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instance, they can avoid

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soft drinks where they contain a large amount of

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, or by

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adding

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in their drinks and using a natural sweetness like honey

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.

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, being a smart shopper will help to

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consuming

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the consumption of

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;

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, we can purchase free

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products

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. In conclusion, many

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have diabetes, where

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plays the leading to increasing the number of diabetics. I believe that the

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and

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work together to

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reduce the consumption

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of

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sugar

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. The

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can raise health awareness

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people

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, and consumers can

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using

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.