IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

In some countries, government are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

#countries #government #industries #businesses #move #areas #cities #trend
Some people stick to the point that the merits of transferring industries and businesses by government to exurbanite outweigh the demerits.
However
, I personally believe that encouraging people to establish their businesses outside cities has more pros than cons. Admittedly, there are some basic disadvantages of moving businesses and industries far from big cities. One problem is that when people want to go to their workplaces should drive by own car that leads to increasing air pollution by emitting carbon dioxide and carbon monoxide to the atmosphere
also
 another issue which is possible to say that people for going to their jobs should spend more time and money due to the distant way and price of public transportation. As one good example is that in my hometown Tehran using own car for driving to outside cities contribute to climate change and they are poisoning themselves. Despite the drawbacks, relocating businesses and industries has some benefits. The main reason for
this
 is that factories burn fossil fuels
that is
 contributed to increase air pollution in big cities, so by transferring industries outside cities can protect people from physical health problem
such
 as cancer. Another reason
that is
 moving businesses and industries helps people economically.
For instance
, each square in the big cities is as precious as gold.
Consequently
, it is economic for people to set up their business and industries outside cities. It is
also
 benefiting customers due to the decline of production cost. In conclusion,
although
 relocating of huge industries and companies in regional zone has some disadvantages it seems to me the benefits of it outweigh the drawbacks.
Submitted by melika4120 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: