Loneliness is an increasing problem in many societies, especially among the elderly. Why is this? How might it be remedied?

Earlier people used to live healthier and happier life. But due to the
rapidly
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rapid
change in
lifestyle people
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lifestyle, people
feel
alone especially
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alone, especially
when they are old. There are various
issue
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issues
behind
loneliness
in older
people
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peoples'
peoples
lives.
However
,
this
can be cured by taking some small efforts by changing our lifestyle.
To begin
with,
loneliness
is not a new phenomenon. People of all ages face
this
problem
, but
this
is mostly affected by the old people, one of the major
problem
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problems
is
drastic increase
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a drastic increase
the drastic increase
in nuclear families. Youngster leave their parents and grandparents and move to another country that they are not able to give time to them. Another key factor, generation gap is increasing day by day,
this
lead to clash of many ideas and disrespect among
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
people. To tackle the
problem
of
loneliness
, people should start accepting traditional life,
such
as by living in joint family. They should spend their time with the parents and grandparents by engaging some activities. In
past
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the past
, old people were considered as
back bone
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the backbone
backbone
of the families.
In addition
, not only
children but
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children, but
even older people should try to engage themselves some of the activities.
For example
, by joining clubs through which they can make new friends and talk to them, visiting parks, by walking in
morning
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the morning
or in
evening
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the evening
this
will help them to maintain their fitness and be
physical
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physically
active or they can peruse some other interest. To conclude, people should try to adopt living in joint families, spend time with them and not only
youngster but
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youngster, but
even old people should try to take
step
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steps
from their end and keep themselves busy in some or the other activities.
Thus by
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Thus, by
taking small steps the
problem
of
loneliness
will no longer be able to survive in societies.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • isolation
  • social support networks
  • superficial connections
  • anonymity
  • work-life balance
  • multi-generational households
  • urbanization
  • meaningful relationships
  • community involvement
  • alleviate
  • responsible use
  • face-to-face interaction
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