Some people prefer to be self-employed, whereas other like working for companies or institutions. Which is a better approach? Give your opinion?

Many people
endeavor
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
to set up their personal corporation or hustle to secure the
job
in multinational companies. Some folks prefer to have their own
business
instead
of working under someone, while on contrary side others would rather favour to have
job
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jobs
. As per my opinion, being the independent owner is far better than working for someone else. Having a private company is more beneficial because the opportunities
of
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for
growth are enormous as
compare
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comparable
comparatively
to jobs. If the individual
come
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comes
up with a million-dollar idea and got
succeed
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succeeded
in it,
then
there is
high probability
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a high probability
of becoming
billionaire
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a billionaire
billionaires
within
few years
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a few years
.
For instance
, Warren Buffet is a self-made billionaire who became rich by starting an insurance company and doing
trading
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the trading
. Starting a
business
does ask for extra hard
work but
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work, but
the results are fruitful. Addition to
this
the owner of the
business
have no fix hours, he can
work
whenever he wants to as well as there is no possibility of getting laid-off in crisis. To exemplify, currently because of pandemic so many workers have lost their
job
.
Conversely
, some people support doing
job
because it has less
risk
and more security. In
job
the
work
hours are fixed, not like a
business
where you must
work
, day and night.
For instance
, the
job
hours are fixed from 9-6 and the employee receive holidays on
weekend
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the weekend
weekends
a weekend
but for
boss
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boys
bosses
bosses bosses
the boss
365 days are working days. Having a
job
have
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has
lot
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lots
more less risky than having
business
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a business
because chance of failure of the
business
is high.
Although
I believe in working for myself
instead
of working for
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
and make them richer from my hard
work
. It has
risk but
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a risk, but
a risk but
it rewards much higher than its
risk
. In conclusion, being a boss of
own
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ownership
is better
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
being employed for others. If the enough hard
work
is served in
business
the chances of having successful
business
is higher. Even the
job
has not much
risk but
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risk, but
it does not accommodate with sufficient growth opportunities and the growth of individual become stagnant.
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