The diagram below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below show the stages and equipment used 

in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The process diagrams illustrate the different steps of activity, materials, and types of machinery used for
cement
production and concrete manufacture for buildings.
Overall
, seemingly,
the
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cement
production consists of 5 stages, which comprise
of
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crushing, mixing, heating, grinding, and packaging.
However
, in the concrete manufacturing process,
cement
, water, sand, and gravel are accumulated in a container and mixed well in the concrete mixer to prepare the final product. In the case of
cement
production, limestone and clay are crashing in the first point;
then
, in the
second
stage, these are mixed together as
a
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powder
form
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. In the
third
phase, materials are heated in a rotating heater with a continuous blow of heat from one end of the tube before grinding in the fourth stage. In the final step,
cement
is produced and ready to be bagged. In the case of concrete manufacturing, four types of ingredients are mixed together in the concrete mixer. In the mixer, 50% of the material is
gravels
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which are small stone, with that,
25
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% sand, 15%
cement
, and 10% water is poured and mixed, which
finally
become
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a concrete
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concrete
a block of concrete
a hunk of concrete
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and can be used in buildings.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cement with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • stages
  • equipment
  • cement-making process
  • raw materials
  • crushed
  • heated
  • kiln
  • clinker
  • ground
  • fine powder
  • sand
  • gravel
  • water
  • concrete
  • building purposes
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