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Some think that ambition is a good quality. Is it important to be ambitious? Is it a positive or negative characteristic?

#think #ambition #quality
According to
 some individuals, being ambitious is a positive quality. In my opinion,
this
 characteristic is the most vital one in all aspects of
life
 among humans.
Moreover
,
this
 quality has several useful features which make it, indeed,
good
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 habit.
Ambition
 is considered
as
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a trigger to achieve great impressive accomplishments in
people
`s
life
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, I believe. To be precise, only the most ambitious person can achieve what they want in his or her
life
, as
such
people
 tend to be motivated and they adore what they do.
Furthermore
,
such
 motivated individuals listen to their inner voice and intuition, which make them successful in all spheres of
life
,
such
 as in friendship, career, family and hundreds of others, I admit.
For instance
,
according to
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co-founder
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 of world-leading companies, namely Apple Corporation, Pixar Animation,
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 studio, Steve Jobs achieved all his milestones and goals only with the help of his
ambition
 and eagerness.
Moreover
,
this
 characteristic has many positive aspects. In my viewpoint, the most striking case of
such
 positiveness is being flexible. Precisely, ambitious
people
 do not give up their goals and milestones during
ups
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 and downs of their
life
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,
instead
, they try to find other ways of reaching their destination and tend to
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any
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 kind of situation positively. I think,
this
 fact about it, is
the
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 clear sign of its advantage side, which makes it
positive
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 characteristic among individuals. The findings of recent research conducted by scholars at the National University Board of England can be
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, here.
According to
 them, during
long
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 period of changes since human evolution, only
people
 with
such
 quality survived and they are likely to do so in the future, as well, with all respect to
their
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 flexibility created by
ambition
.
To conclude
,
ambition
 is crucial in the personal development of humans, I believe.
In addition
 to
this
,
due to
the
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 very characteristic,
people
 become flexible
in
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 their whole
life
, no matter in which situation they are
.
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task response
Ensure that your response clearly addresses all parts of the question in a direct and relevant manner. Focus on providing a more balanced view on the positive and negative aspects of ambition.
coherence cohesion
Continue to use linking words and cohesive devices to improve the overall coherence of the essay. Work on organizing the ideas in a more systematic and sequential manner to enhance the logical flow of the essay.
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