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Nowadays, Internet addiction is becoming a common phenomenon. What are causes and effects of this problem?

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Internet addiction in
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 generation has become a very common phenomenon. Mostly we can notice
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 type addiction in kids who are in school and in adults as well. Internet addiction has both positives and negatives. It completely depends on the way we
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 it in the right way.
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, the literate people
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 the internet for their study purpose and doing their assignments etc. Parents have to keep an eye on their children, that to what extent they are using
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, the people who are illiterate, who don't, the proper
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 of it will
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 for another purpose
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 as surfing and in some criminal cases. When both the parents go to work, where leaving the children alone at home will lead to negative uses of the internet.
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 will happen mostly in the middle class family, where their parents are illiterate and go for their daily wage works. On the whole, the rapid growth in technology will help us in the long run. The more technology in the future will help the future teaching and learning purpose. The negative shades of
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 is we will lose the human interaction, sympathy. Starring or working on system for longer run will damage the eye sight and may cause to migrate as well.
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