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Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As a result
 of the growth of supermarkets in some countries, many local businesses have died out. Some people argue that without local business, local communities will not exist. In my opinion, I agree that the communities will suffer as small, local businesses
close but
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close, but
 it is questionable that it will cause the death of local communities.
First
 of all, when large system stores are located in small cities, they make competition for small local stores without their strength. Because
system stores
Suggestion
the system stores
 are often made through a famous franchise in the country.
This
 is a profession that has spent a lot of money on advertising for the franchise, and if they have a turnover and their cooking is the ones that stand in the flow. It is difficult to compete with small retail chains. Another reason people tend to
shop
 in supermarkets is that, there are always some rewards associated with the purchases, promotion in the store. For small businesses, it is very expensive to make
such
 privileges for their customers. Some businesses might consider
to leave
Suggestion
leaving
 the area and looking for new opportunities.
As a result
, less and less businesses can survive in the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
. Many locals still demand on types of market and unique
shops even
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shops, even
 in a small community
such
 as
farmer's market
Suggestion
farmer's markets
a farmer's market
,
second
-hand
shop
 and so on, which are not the target products of supermarkets.
Furthermore
, many locals still prefer to
shop
 in local stores due to their years of shopping preferences and close relationship with
shop
 owners. To conclude, even though a community can be
challenged
Suggestion
challenging
 to maintain along with the growth of supermarkets, I believe that a community with a variety of demand will continue to stay.
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