The news media have too much influence on people's lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

The more developed technology become, the more widespread the news media are. The advanced news media have aroused a source of controversy that whether
news media
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the news media
have too much adverse effect on the world’s development. Speaking of myself, I am not completely convinced by
this
point of view. It is undeniable that mass media has brought a lot of enormous benefits to mankind. It is an indispensable part of human life. Thanks to the news media, people are able to know the forecast weather and bring
umbrella
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an umbrella
along them whenever they go out if it will rain. New media allows human to update the latest news regularly
everyday
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every day
. Before the invention of media, the knowledge of human about everything around the world is really limited. Nowadays, media
facilitates
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facilitate
us to be well-informed about
cultures
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the cultures
and traditions of different countries. Everyone can know more about the common trend in the world, globalisation and it is very easy for all of them to be
integrate
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integrated
with foreign friends.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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