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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph illustrates the amount of energy consumed by Americans in six different kinds categories of fuels between 1980 and 2030. In general, the vast majority of energy used in the USA is petrol and oil,
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 the consumptions of nuclear, solar/wind
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 and
hydro power
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hydropower

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 always remain at the lowest levels. In 1980, people in the USA consumed about 35
quadrillion
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units
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 of petrol and oil. In the same year, around 20
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units
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 of coal and 17
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units
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 of natural gas were used. Meanwhile, the figures for nuclear, solar/wind and
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 were exactly the same in 1980, about 4
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units
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. During the whole period shown, the consumption of petrol and oil, coal, and natural gas
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 a slight increase and is projected to peak at about 48, 30, and 25
quadrillion
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units
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 respectively in 2030. During
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 period, the amount of nuclear, solar/wind and
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hydropower

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 used stays relatively unchanged at approximately 5
quadrillion
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.
units
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words quadrillion, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy consumption
  • projections
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable resources
  • sustainable
  • fossil fuels
  • nuclear energy
  • biofuels
  • hydroelectric power
  • solar energy
  • wind energy
  • trends
  • increases/decreases
  • shifts
  • milestones
  • significant
  • forecast
  • implications
  • sustainable development
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