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Some people believe that the advent of economical air travel has been very beneficial by making international travel more accessible,while other argue that it has had a very negative impact discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In today's world, due to
air
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 travelling overseas
travel
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 is more approachable.
whereas
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Whereas
,
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,
some people deny
this
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 and said it has negative effects. I tend to think that
although
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 international
travel
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 by
air
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travel
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 is easily reachable
,
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,
but it creates
large amount
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a large amount
large amounts
 of pollution in
environment
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the environment
. To commence
with, economical
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, with economical
air
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travel
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 has been comprehensive
spectaculary
sensational in appearance or thrilling in effect
spectacular
 advantages by manufacturing international
travel
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.
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first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
 and foremost is that
bussinessman
the body of individuals who manage businesses
businessmen
businessman
 can open their work in other countries through the international
travel
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 not only
this
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, but
also
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 for students who tend to do study abroad. They can pursue higher education
becouse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 of accessible international
travel
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. Thereby, noways many of learners
,
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,
people and
bussiessmen
the body of individuals who manage businesses
businessmen
 are going to
foriegn
of concern to or concerning the affairs of other nations (other than your own)
foreign
 for
seize
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seizing
 golden opportunities. On the other side
,
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,
 it
gather
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gathers
hinderence
something immaterial that interferes with or delays action or progress
hindrance
 in many ways in human lives.
Firstly
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,
air
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travel
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spread
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spreads
 the noise and
air
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 pollution. It is apparent that aeroplane
consume
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consumes
 non
rewnable
that can be renewed or extended
renewable
 resources like
huge amount
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the huge amount
huge amounts
a huge amount
 of
fuel
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fuel, then
then
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, it released the carbon dioxide in the atmosphere.
profoundly
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Profoundly
, excessive people are hunted by different diseases just because of it.
Moreover
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, it
put
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puts
direct impact
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a direct impact
 on
ears
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the ears
. Aeroplane is one of the
cause
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causes
 of noise pollution.
Hence
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,
air
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travel
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 has
poor effect
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a poor effect
 on nature which destroy the environment. In conclusion, even though,
air
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travel
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 keeps
valunerable effect
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the vulnerable effect
vulnerable effect
 on the
environment but
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environment, but
 the advantage
are autweigh
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have outweighed
are outweigh
are outweighs
are outweighed
 the disadvantages.
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