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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph gives
the
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information about how products were transported in the UK (measured in millions of
tonnes
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) by road, water, rail or pipeline from 1974 to 2002.
Overall
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, all the methods of transportation of products in the UK showed an upward trend throughout the
period
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. Regarding the
graph
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 the greatest amount of usage of
road
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the road
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 was 70
million
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tonnes
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 in 1974 and kept increasing reaching nearly 100
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002. At the start of the
period
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 delivering products by water and railway
were
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 almost the same
accounted
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accounting
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 for 40
million
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tonnes
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.
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However
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 the railway system illustrated mainly
downward
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a downward
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 trend constituting
the
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a
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 minimum of 20
million
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tonnes
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,
while
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water
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the water
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 route proceeded to rise to 65
million
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tonnes
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. It is noticeable that pipeline convey had the lowest point compared with other ways. About 5
million
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of
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goods were carried by pipelines, reaching 20
million
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tonnes
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 by the end of the
period
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.
Likewise
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, the road system
of
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 delivering goods was the most popular over the
period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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