Art is considered to be an important part of society as well as an expression of its culture. Do you think it is important to for children to taught art? Do you think children should be encouraged to focus on art rather than other subjects?

Nowadays,
art
become
Suggestion
becomes
an integral part of our culture and we might not imagine our world without an
art
. Some people consider that
art
should not be taught to children. In my opinion, it is important for children
been
the state or fact of existing
being
taught an
art
;
however
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
disagree that children ought to concentrate more on
art
than on other more crucial subjects. On the one hand, the
art
is very important in people's lives. I think that children should be taught the masterpieces of
art
and understand the hide meaning of
paintings
Suggestion
the paintings
.
However
, taking in consideration that children might be more concentrated on
art
than on subjects is improper. In my view, the directors of schools can include an
art
as a lesson. The
art
lessons could become a mundane subject at school. Children will be taught an
art
in
superficial manner
Suggestion
a superficial manner
and will pay enough attention to other subjects.
On the other hand
,
art
might become a boring lesson for children. In my opinion, the
art
will not be
involve
Suggestion
involved
all kids and some of them may not enjoy it. Unfortunately, it might become true and because of it an
art
should not be
oblige
Suggestion
obliged
for children. If kids want to understand the
art
, they will learn it in the future. Children will have enough time in their future and will not waste their time at school, where they and without an
art
has enough subjects. In conclusion, an
art
Suggestion
artist
should not be
oblige
Suggestion
obliged
for children. If they want they will have enough time to learn it in the future.
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