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Universities should take the same number of men and women in each major. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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According to some people, the number of boys and girls admitted to any course should be the same.
In other
words half
Accept comma addition
words, half
 of the seats should be reserved for male candidates and half should be reserved for female candidates. I do not agree with
this
 view. In my opinion, merit, and not
gender
, should be the criterion for
admission
 into
university
 programmes. The argument that the number of boys and girls in each course should be the same is illogical in every aspect. To start with, it shows utter disregard for merit. If seats are reserved on the basis of
gender
, many meritorious students will fail to get
admission
.
Also
, while
this
 move might seem to be an attempt to empower women by increasing their participation in
university
 courses, that really is not the case. Almost every
university
 in the world already admits both boys and girls. In order to secure
admission
 to a
university
 programme of her choice, a girl only has to get good grades. If she waits for reservation to gain
admission
, it is akin to admitting that her skills are not on par with those of male students. Another argument against reserving seats on the basis of
gender
 is the difference in the aptitude of men and women. Certain courses like nursing, home science or teaching are more popular among the girls.
Likewise
, certain courses like engineering and mechanics are more popular among boys. If half of the seats are reserved for boys in a nursing course, chances are many seats will lie vacant. At the same time, many meritorious girls will fail to get
admission
. Even in courses where both boys and girls have the same aptitude,
this
 arrangement will prevent many deserving candidates from gaining
admission
 just because they belong to the other
gender
. To conclude, after analysing various scenarios that might arise from the implementation of
this
 decision, it is not hard to see that reserving
university
 seats on the basis of
gender
 is unwise. It may dilute the quality of education by letting undeserving students in and preventing deserving students from securing
admission
.
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