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Children's lives these days are quite different from our generation's. Describe what are the biggest changes in the younger generation and explain some factors of this phenomenon.

Nowadays, there are a vast amount of crucial
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 that
occurs
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 around the world.
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, people’s lives
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changes
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 and
children
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 are no exception.
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 of
such
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changes
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,
modern
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generation
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have
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completely
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 different lifestyle, interests and so on compared to the previous
generation
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.
This
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 essay is going to analyse
this
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 phenomenon using examples to demonstrate the points.
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 with, the modern
generation
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 has
an
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 ability to learn faster.
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, higher brain bandwidth is a core part of the ability to understand something new and deeply explore
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.
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, based on some American research, the present
generation
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demonstrate
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 a considerable increase in the amount of knowledge, speed of studying and understanding information that they can learn compared to previous
generations
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, learning languages or unusual skills is getting easier and easier for today’s
children
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, the modern
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 developed the ability to think abstractly.
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, today’s youngsters are more creative in
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 a problem than previous
generations
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. In fact, modern
artist
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artists
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 and architects could impress anyone
by
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 their breathtaking projects.
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, nowadays’
generation
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 is even more creative in creating unusual ways to address a problem.
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, 16 years old teenager came to NASA for an internship and in 3 days he found a new planet in the solar system that cannot be found by several
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 of scientists.
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,
this
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 fact clearly demonstrates that
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modern
children
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 have
more
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 creative way of thinking than previous
generations
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To conclude
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, modern
children
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 have undergone many significant
changes
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 and,
as a result
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, have become more creative and dramatically increased their speed of studying. Generally, many researches reveal that nowadays’
generation
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have
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 even more hidden geniuses compared to previous
generations
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.

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task response
The essay adequately addresses the task and provides relevant examples to support the points. However, it could benefit from a more focused and balanced approach to discussing the changes in the younger generation.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents a well-structured introduction and conclusion, helping to frame the discussion effectively. The paragraph development and transition words contribute to coherence and cohesion. However, some paragraphs lack clear topic sentences and could be further linked to enhance coherence.
lexical resource
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses appropriate terminology to discuss the topic. However, there is a tendency to repeat certain words and phrases, and some expressions could be more varied and precise.
grammatical range
The essay shows a generally accurate and varied use of complex structures, demonstrating a good command of grammatical range. However, there are instances of errors in subject-verb agreement, word choice, and sentence structure that could be addressed for greater clarity and accuracy.
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