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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #money #computer #technology #functions
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The pervasive revolution of advanced
technology
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 has long been a topic of profound interest to the public. A lot of people consider public libraries extravagant as the up-to-date computer
technology
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 can provide humans with the full functions of conventional libraries. In my two cents, I totally disagree and
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 essay aims to shed light on the economical aspect and the impossibility of
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 assumption in difficult areas. To commence with, it is incontestable that online libraries obviously benefit humans from a multitude of reading materials
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 as articles, magazines,...
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 convenience and quickness.
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,
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 statement is no longer valid and lacks evidence to back up its possibility. Specifically, conventional libraries incorporate not only a great
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diversity, but
 complementary sources of books of all genres as well.
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, e-books provide a plethora of reading
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materials, but
 they charge readers high prices due to the copyright, which is definitely not affordable especially with students.
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 as well as the internet or other numerous social networking sites are absolutely inaccessible in mountainous areas.
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, public libraries play an indispensable part in mountainous areas, which arouse the passion for gaining knowledge
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of
 book-reading habits in children with uneducated backgrounds in difficult areas. In conclusion, I strongly believe that public libraries are pivotal and cannot be underestimated due to the aforementioned aspects.
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, the authorities had better concentrate on enhancing the
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 as well as online libraries, especially in mountainous areas to bring into the play the full potential of computer
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repositories of books
  • promoting literacy
  • community engagement
  • equal access to information
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
  • personalized assistance
  • educational programs
  • cultural events
  • safe spaces
  • community meetings
  • tactile experience
  • preserving historical documents
  • important cultural repositories
  • fostering a sense of community
  • communal hubs
  • serene and focused environment
  • conducive to study and reflection
  • irreplaceable value
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