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Topic. Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in a group while others believe that it is better for them to study alone. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 academic success is becoming challenging as the day goes by, and so, scholars put in enormous effort in a bid to succeed, as
such
, individuals come up with varying opinions. Some think that better results are achieved through group studying,
however
,
others
 still believe that solitary learning is more effective, I will try to dissect these diverging views in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, the importance of learning in groups cannot be
over emphasized
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, it offers the individuals involved the opportunity to explore each other's knowledge and grasp
one
 or two things from another person's perspective.
Furthermore
, it reduces errors, because, by the involvement of more than
one
 person, most mistakes could be spotted and corrected.
For example
, during my undergraduate thesis, there were calculations I got wrong during independent study, but when I involved a friend of mine, the error was discovered and
subsequently
 rectified.
Nonetheless
,
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 with
others
also
 has its demerits, it can bring about distraction,
lack
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 of concentration and could even lead to defaulting in learning.
One
 or two of the members could even decide to seek
for
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fun rather than the task at hand, which may in turn discourage
others
.
For instance
, there was a time during my college days when a group of my friends
an
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and
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 I planned to go to an evening class to read, it happened that a few didn't show up, but rather decided to go partying, the rest of us were demoralized and the class didn't hold. In conclusion,
to study
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 with
others
 could be very beneficial,
although
one
need
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 to be careful to go with like minds to avoid being dispirited.
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task response
Ensure that your essay addresses both sides of the argument in a balanced manner. Support your points with clear examples and give a well-reasoned opinion at the end.
coherence cohesion
Your essay is generally well-organized, but make sure that your ideas flow logically and that your examples are well-connected to your points.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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