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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life What are reasons? What are the effects on society and family life?

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In developed nations, giving birth to a child late since marriage has been recently a common decision of modern parents. There are numerous reasons relating to
this
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 phenomenon which has huge influences on both society and family
life
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.
First
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 and foremost, nowadays, people have
propensity
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a propensity
 for work contribution and
goals
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goal
 achievements on their career path, which is a main factor leading to the postponement of having babies. In that case, both partners
also
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 pay attention to ensure the stability of their living conditions,
therefore
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, their children are expected to be born with adequate facilities and fed with varied nutrients.
Secondly
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, some parents-to-be are reluctant to welcome a new member in their family as they want to enjoy the
couple
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coupled
atmostphere
a particular environment or surrounding influence
atmosphere
 for a period of time, or just fear of having moderate knowledge of taking care of a baby so they need more time to acquire.
However
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,
this
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 phenomenon
also
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 leads to adverse effects on family
life
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 and the whole community. Regarding of family aspect, the delay of parenthood contributes to a higher risk of babies suffering from autism and disability stemming from the lessening of parent’s productive healths.
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, children will have less in common with parents due to a huge generation gap which leads to the children’s depression in schools.
On the other hand
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, the act of giving birth
late
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later
 in
life
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, in a long term,
joins
obtain
gains
 a hand in
old population
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the older population
older population
an older population
, so more pensions will be paid
for
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to
 the elderly and companies will lack active employees, which reduces productivity and creativity. All summed up, the delay of having babies among parents might earn much
benefits
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benefit
 for families in a short term, but it’s negative impacts on other aspects of
life
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 are undeniable. From my standpoint, parents should balance between work and parenthood but they should give
births
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birth
 before 30s to ensure a healthy family.
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