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The graph gives information about the consumoption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990

The graph gives information about the consumoption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990
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The line chart represents the data on fast food expended in Great Britain between 1970 and 1990. The quantities are measured in
grams
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 per
week
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.
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, there was a noticeable decrease in the consumption of pizza and a significant increase in the expenditure
of
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hamburger
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 and fish & chips. Pizza was the most popular fast food at the
begining
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beginning
 of the period at about 300
grams
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 per
week
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. But there was a steady downward trend in the amount consumed until 1985.
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this
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 there was a small increase
during
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 1985 and 1990. The consumption of fish and chips began lower than that of pizza at 80
grams
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week
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. From 1970 to 1980, there was a marked increase in the amount consumed, after 1980, it
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 rocketed up to 500
grams
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week
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 in 1990.
Hamburger
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Hamburgers
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 had the lowest consumption in 1970 at 30
grams
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 per
week
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.
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 it went up slightly in the period
of
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 1970 and 1985. After 1985, the amount of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 consumed exploded from 110
grams
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 per
week
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 in 1985 to 290
grams
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 per
week
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 in 1990.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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