Health expert believe that walking is good exercise for health.howerver people are walking less nowadays.why is thise happening and what are the solutions?

Better
health
is central to human happiness and we'll
being
take something or somebody with oneself somewhere
bring
. Many
health
advisors insist on walking as a better exercise
.
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With the advent of
automation industry
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automation, industrial
automation industrial
the habit of Jogging and walking has almost extinct. The viable method to indulge people in walking is by organising marathons and endorsing walk benefits advertisement. The Contemporary world is a
manifestatio
a clear appearance
manifestation
of Cars
,
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,
bikes and lots of other means of transport from one place to another. In
this
era people prefer to book a cab and reach a 1 km far office rather than walking or bicycling
such
a small distance.The reasons can be the lifestyle
,
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,
fatigue
,
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work pressure or time constraints.
For
example according
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example, according
to world
health
organisations statistics of
data 85
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data, 85
% people in
newyork
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new York
new york
do not work even walk 10000
recommendes
push for something
recommended
steps in a day. The doable solutions can be self motivation to walk
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For
this
government should initiate more
health
awareness programs and ads
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Even the flash ads on
internet
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the internet
should give useful tips
for
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to
walk.
Secondly
organisations should motivate their staff to use bicycles or walk till office
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Other
intiatives
readiness to embark on bold new ventures
initiatives
like marathon competitions at
district state
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district, state
and national level should be organised for varied sectors to boost up the moral of those stemming up to become proactive in improving physical
health
. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
would say that the walking is a great exercise for
health but people
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health, but people
can be motivated to walk more through awareness ads
,
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competitions and instructions by organisations
.
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