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3.) Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. You should write at least 250 words. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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There has been a change in people’s lifestyle over the past few years. Nowadays people have hectic work schedules and have less
time
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 for
leisure
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 activities. There is no denying the fact that
leisure
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time
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 relieve stress and makes one energetic. Some people prefer to spend their
leisure
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time
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 reading, playing sports and solving word puzzles while other people prefer to rest. In my
opinion it
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opinion, it
 is important to spend their
leisure
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time
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 enhancing their knowledge and skills. Activities like reading and puzzle games are good ways to spend
leisure
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time
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. One cannot deny the multiple advantages of reading. Many scholars and writers have spoken of the importance of reading. Reading not only increases their
knowledge but
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knowledge, but
also
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 keeps them up to date with current affairs.
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, word puzzles
helps
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help
 them to keep up their mind sharp and efficient. The lifestyles of many people
has dramatically changed
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have dramatically changed
 because of economic crisis and recessions,
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 people get involved in multiple jobs to earn a living. So, it is necessary to have peace and
rest which
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rest, which
 can be achieved by doing activities like watching
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it
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 and listening to music.
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 activities relieves their stress and boosts energy. In my opinion, it is of vital importance for each individual to spend their
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time
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 doing constructive activities like reading and solving puzzle games.
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 will not only increase their
knowledge but
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knowledge, but
 will
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 make their mind sharp and enable them to make better decisions for their future.
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