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'Telecommuting' refers to workers doing their jobs from home for part of each week and communicating with their office using computer technology. Telecommuting is growing in many countries and is expected to be common for most office workers in the coming decades. How do you think society will be affected by the growth of telecommuting

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In the modern era, the use of computers and information technology has benefited companies a lot. The use of computer networks has made it possible for employees to
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 away from their offices and
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 is becoming extremely popular nowadays and will continue to grow in the years to come. In my opinion, the employers can benefit immensely through the use of
telecommuting which
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telecommuting, which
 will not only increase the productivity of employees, but will
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 saves company’s expenses.
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 helps employers to increase the productivity of employees by having a constant connection with them.
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, an employee working from his residence is available to
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 most of the time,
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 minimizing the response time for any particular project.
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 the
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 from home culture brings down the traffic related problem significantly. The traffic jam, noise and air pollution can be reduced by less commuting of workers.
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, a lot of companies are saving revenues because there is no need for the employers to be present at their office premises all the times, especially companies that have global presence and are planning to expand their operations in a new place don’t specifically need to rent out expensive offices or furniture, rather higher employees and make them
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 from home. To conclude, in the coming years telecommuting will be one of the most practiced norms in the companies as
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 type of technology not only offers a great deal of flexibility
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 business but
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 provides
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efficient
 and cost savings.
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