the diagram below shows the stages and and equipment used in the process of making matches. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The draw illustrates how matches are being made and the equipment used in the process.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that this
is a linear process including 9 steps, starting with peel
the log and finishing with the matches in Wrong verb form
peeling
packaging
Correct article usage
the packaging
area
.
Firstly
, the log is blade by the peeler then
it will be moved to the chopper and cut into small pieces of wood. After that, it will be soaked in the ammonium phosphate tank
then
go to the dryer. Later, the Correct word choice
and then
woods
will be put in a hopper, Fix the agreement mistake
wood
go
through the metal duct to the storage Correct word choice
and go
area
. Next
, it will be slide
down the inserter.
The perforated steel belt will soak the Change the verb form
slide
woods
in Fix the agreement mistake
wood
Correct article usage
the parrafin
parrafin
wax Correct your spelling
paraffin
tank
, then
moved
to Wrong verb form
move
based
chemicals Correct article usage
the based
tank
, and finally
is
tip chemicals Change preposition
to is
tank
. Subsequently
, the matches will be move
to the drying Change the verb form
be moved
be moving
area
and will be aired till dry. Finally
, the matches will be packed in the packaging area
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.
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