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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is an indisputable the fact that since the
first
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 car manufactured, it has increased significantly on many streets. In my opinion, it should not have an enormous impact on our lives, and the authorities ought to regulate
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 phenomenon and encourage other methods of transportation. There are two ways that people should use to commute and reduce dependence on cars: bicycle and public transports.
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 and foremost, biking has beneficial effects on people's health. People who cycle are generally healthier because they are less likely to be diagnosed with obesity and cardiovascular diseases.
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, public transports reduce traffic congestion due to the capacity to serve a large number of passengers at a time.
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, both
kind
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kinds
 of
transportation help to
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transportation to help
 diminish
human carbon footprint
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the human carbon footprint
 on our plant,
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, slowing down greenhouse effect impacts on the global environment.
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, these methods of commuting will become more prevalent if national authorities impose regulations on car ownership and use. In Denmark and Japan,
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, because the governments introduced laws, which gave people the incentive to become
less dependence
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less dependent
less dependant
 on cars,
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the amount
 of car usage in these nations are notably lower
compares
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comparable
compared
comparing
 to that of bikes, buses and Skytrains.
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, the conditions of these nations experienced significantly less air pollution and member of the public often healthier, which prolong life expectancy, compared to the USA. In conclusion, for all the reasons above, I advocate for new laws that can alleviate human dependence on private automatic vehicles
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 as cars, to solve other burning issues in the world.
Submitted by Grayson Truong on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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