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Today, TV channels provide men’s sport shows more than women’s sport shows. Why? Should TV channels give equal time for women’s sport and men’s sport?

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Some people say that male sports programs broadcast most of the airtime on television than that of their counterparts. In
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show time
 for women’s and men’s sports. I believe many reasons cause for less coverage of female sports.
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, since the rating for men’s programs always overtakes women’s, the more viewers watch programs, the more profit TV producers earn. Take a football match as an example, the final soccer match to win the Sea game 2019 championship between Vietnam and Indonesia, which drew a million attention not only Vietnamese but
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 people from all around Asia.
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, channel providers earn more mass coverage and sponsorship dollars.
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, taking priority of men’s sports programs over women’s,
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, is a wise strategy to attract more investment.
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, female athletes are barely acknowledged because of their sex and household duties.
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, their participation in sports is not welcomed in some countries or is even devalued in the mass media.
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, I agree that channel providers should extend the streaming time of
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the female shows
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 reason is that the participation of females in sports would inspire the spirited sport to women audiences. By doing that,
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 enables individuals to raise awareness and practice exercise to keep their health well-being.
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, it is a human right that everyone should have opportunities to do whatever they want to do. There should be no disparity between all sexes in sports, nor society, nor all the world.
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, genders should not be the thing to inhibit individuals from performing their talents. In conclusion, even though increasing the showtime of men’s sports programs is economically beneficial for channel providers, it is better to give greater equality in the coverage of men’s and women’s shows.
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