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Alcohol abuse is becoming more and more common nowadays in many countries. What are some of the problems associated with alcohol abuse? And what are some possible solutions?

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Alcoholism is becoming a serious trouble in many nations.
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 alcohol threatens many societies, there are various suggests to combat it. Drug addiction causes multiple problems for countries and communities.
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 with, it causes negative results on people`s health. Drinking too much can lead to harmful short-term and long-term effects. It can affect physical and mental health, your job, your finances, your family and community. Heavy drinkers lose their selves-control and sometimes their
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mentality
, so they cannot act well. The addicted individuals could lose their lives through illnesses related to excessive ethanol intake and accidents have occurred due to drunk driving. Alcohol can damage
citizen`s heart
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the citizen`s heart
, kidney and livers. The
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 impact is crimes. People who take drugs become crazy and they often cause harm and danger to themselves and other. They steal and maybe kill to gain money and buy drugs. To avert these issues, education is the main solution. People need to be aware of alcohols` bad sides. Each country should have its programs and specialized institutions which help people stay away from them. Even social media through the famous actors, popular footballer and well known singers has
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a major role
 in
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 process. Children need to be told at home and at school about the dangers of drugs,
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 their parents and their teachers should talk with them. A
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 approach is to increase police powers to stop dealers and to enforce the law. In conclusion, while drug abuse is a serious issue all around the world and there is no way to stop it entirely, but these are some crucial steps that could be taken to reduce its outcomes.
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