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Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to have a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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some
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Some
 people are of an opinion that, individuals who are steadily focused
in
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on
 their work life will have a
gratifyingly
 productive career compared to the ones who keep switching their jobs.To some extent I agree with the statement
,
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,
 as
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe, perseverance is the key to success.
no
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No
 doubt
,
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,
everybody wants a prosperous
career but
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career, but
 very few are able to achieve it
,
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,
those who made the right professional choices that made their work pleasurable.
persistence
Suggestion
Persistence
 results in
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 outcomes,
for
example if
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example, if
 a person
is working
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has been working
 as a teacher for a long time they not only gain experience but are
also
 promoted to a higher post where they are given more authority along with responsibilities based on their accomplishments.
frequent
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Frequent
 alteration of jobs is
accceptable
worthy of acceptance or satisfactory
acceptable
 in some cases where
their
in or at that place
there
 is a mismatch between
employee's
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employees'
 supply and company's demand or if one feels their potential is not fully utilised.
but
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But
 in doing so, one should be responsible enough to know when to stop
otherwise
 they will
endup
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end up
 with regret.
for
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For
 instance
,
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,
if a person keeps changing jobs he will have no proper experience that
willl
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 be considered acceptable and by the time he gets familiar with one job
,
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,
he is already looking for another.
yes
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Yes
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 agree that
holiding
the act of retaining something
holding
 firmly a work position can be much more rewarding in the long term compared to the ones, who keep exploring vacancies for temporary jobs.
it
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It
might be look
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might look
might be looked
 exciting and
adventurous but
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adventurous, but
 not beneficial in the long run.
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