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Some people think that watching sports in one’s free time is just waste of time. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #sports #one’s #time #waste
Enjoying of the
leasure
time available for ease and relaxation
leisure
time
 is one of the greatest pleasures that anybody can get into
themselves
objective case of they
them
. Today's world, Some people are watching their
favourite
sport
programes during
Accept comma addition
programs, during
programs during
programmes during
 in their free
time
 and others do the other things. Frequently, few people argue that, watching your
favourite
sport's
Suggestion
sports
 channel is just wasting the one's
time
. I strongly disagree with
this
 statement and following
this
 essay will explain my viewpoints in detail and reach to a proper conclusion.
Firstly
, it
can be argue
Suggestion
can be argued
 that, today's many people do love for the sports.
This
 is clear that, all of the age group people are used to watch their
favourite
 sports on tv, mobile and internet broadcast.
Specially
Suggestion
Especially
, during their free
time
 still some of the people are used to watch the previous games and
this
 is helped to feel them so good. In
this
 way, sports lovers are expressing their curiosity and enthusiasm towards the
sport
. Since from the childhood, some of the kids
prefering
like better; value more highly
preferring
 to watch the television
instead
 playing in the grounds. Doing
such
 way, these kids will feel much
relax
Suggestion
relaxed
 and entertain about themselves.
For example
, the recent study done by the
Califonia
a state in the western United States on the Pacific; the 3rd largest state; known for earthquakes
California
 University in 2011 revealed that, 45% of the USA kids are watching their
favourite
sport
's one on TV after back home from the school.
This
 study
further
 claimed that,
such
 of
children
Suggestion
the children
 are able to be relaxed and calmed by enjoying the tv.
This
 is because kids are working so hard on their school
time
 and
this
 will help to grow their brain by watching entertainment games. As long run,
kids
Suggestion
the kids
 are able to become less stressed and help to become more active kid. Negative
circumstances
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circumstances, such
such
 as weight gaining and anxiety can be created by too much watching these
programes
a series of steps to be carried out or goals to be accomplished
programs
programmes
.
Therefore
, people
also
 have
responsibility
Suggestion
a responsibility
the responsibility
 to participate
into
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in
 outdoor activities
such
 as
excercising
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercising
,
gyming
the act of making a film
filming
gaming
 and sporting with friends rather than into over
addiction
Suggestion
the addiction
 of watching
such
 sports channels.
Therefore
, from the
alaysis
an investigation of the component parts of a whole and their relations in making up the whole
analysis
 of
this
 subject it can be concluded that, the watching sports in one’s free
time
 is not a waste of
time
 and it will definitely
defining
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define
definitely
 the person's hobby.
Moreover
, people
must be engage
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must engage
must be engaged
into
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in
 the various activities other than only doing
this
 watching sports on tv.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • stress reduction
  • communal activity
  • unwind
  • enhance
  • social bonds
  • determination
  • inspire
  • motivate
  • productive
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • personal development
  • excessive consumption
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