IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5

Today , worldly corona virus widespread become every nation problem including education sector and it make many educational officers and experts suggest to spent more budget for free internet access .To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#corona #virus #nation #education #sector #officers #experts #budget #internet #access
COVID-19 pandemic is spreading
fastly
with rapid movements
quickly
world wide
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
worldwide
as a result
 the government implement lock down to reduce the
spread
 of
this
 contagious disease
.
Accept space
.
However
,
Accept space
,
many fields of society negatively affected with
this
 including educational field so many people recommend that more
money
 should be spent on online
classess
a collection of things sharing a common attribute
classes
.I completely agree with
this
 opinion.
Firstly
,
Accept space
,
 many schools are closed for more than six months to prevent the
spread
 of
virus
Suggestion
the virus
a virus
,
hence
 school syllabus
can not
can not
cannot
 be completed
.
Accept space
.
This
 long gap may delay a student"s important time to acquire knowledge so to tackle
this
 time gap
educationalist
 might depend on online coaching
;
Accept space
;
also
 not all
pupil
Suggestion
pupils
 are financially sound to
acess
the right to enter
access
assess
 it
,
Accept space
,
therefore
 it is
justisfiable
capable of being justified
justifiable
 to allocate
money
 from
budget
Suggestion
the budget
.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
 a country"s progress
is depend
Suggestion
depends
 on
educated
Suggestion
educating
 citizens
.
Accept space
.
If government not concentrate on online class
,
Accept space
,
that would badly affect a country"s development
.
Accept space
.
Although
; it is possible to start
regular academic year
Suggestion
the regular academic year
 by maintaining " Break the Chain protocol suggested by W.H.O
,
Accept space
,
but government has to risk people"s life
.
Accept space
.
For example
,
Accept space
,
 after a full body
chek
examine so as to determine accuracy, quality, or condition
check
 up only
student's
Suggestion
the student's
 and teacher's are able to enter
to
Suggestion
into
 the school during that time if they fail to
maintane
keep in a certain state, position, or activity; e.g., "keep clean"
maintain
mention
 safe
distence
the property created by the space between two objects or points
distance
distances
 or not do proper hand
wasing
the work of cleansing (usually with soap and water)
washing
ther
in or at that place
there
 is more chance to
spread
Corona
Suggestion
Coronary
 disease
.
Accept space
.
Hence
,
Accept space
,
 allocating online class with in home
premices
 is an effective measure and that will help to ensure
education
 as normal as
class room
a room in a school where lessons take place
classroom
 teaching
.
Accept space
.
Thirdly
,
Accept space
,
 It is reasonable to spend
money
 from the budget as people are paying taxes
,
Accept space
,
 as a result legally it' is
there
of them or themselves
their
 right to get free
education
 according to the constitution at any circumstances
.
Accept space
.
Moreover
,
Accept space
,
 a long holiday may make student's
to feel
Suggestion
feeling
 lazy and irresponsible to
education
Suggestion
educate
hence
 starting
online coaching
Suggestion
an online coaching
 is helpful to maintain the spirit of
education
. To conclude
,
Accept space
,
 due to the tremendous advantages of online
education
 during the Corona pandemic season
such
 as reduce the
spread
 of infection
,
Accept space
,
 equal
acees
the right to enter
access
 to
education
,
Accept space
,
 way to protect right for free
education
 and make people responsible towards
education
.
Accept space
.
I agree with the view to allocate more
money
 to internet oriented coaching.
Submitted by meeghaljohn89 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: