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Nowadays companies and other organisations are requiring their employees to wear a uniform. What is your viewpoint on this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of wearing a uniform? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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time
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the time
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people
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, people
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 spend most of
the
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their
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 time at
work
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, and there are plenty of different jobs which require
to wear
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wearing
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uniforms
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.
This
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 essay will discuss how the appearance of
workers
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 is important, and it will
tell
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explain
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 how
uniforms
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 can cause some problems and
dissatisfactions
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dissatisfaction
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 at
work
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. Banks, restaurants, offices and
more
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apply
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other professional jobs require
to wear
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wearing
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uniforms
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for looking
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to look
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 more professional and trustworthy. Providing
the
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a
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good looking
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good-looking
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 appearance of
workers
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 will make them pay more attention
on
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to
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 their tasks,
as well as
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it
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apply
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gives
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give
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 a professional view for customers. In fact,
workers
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 feel more professional when they have
uniforms
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 on, and
also
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uniforms
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 help customers to trust the company and buy their products or
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 their services.
However
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, there are some disadvantages of putting
the
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uniform
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 at
workplace
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the workplace
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. In the
workplace
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workplace,
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people
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 have to
work
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 and do not pay attention
of
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to
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 how they look, but
if
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if the
uniform
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 is uncomfortable or unsuitable, it will make
workers
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 concentrate less.
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,
workers
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 become less motivated
and
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, and
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 they feel dissatisfied with their professions.
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, if the company does not provide the
uniform
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,
people
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 have to buy by themselves, which can be
unsatisfied
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unsatisfying
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of
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in
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 finding the right
uniform
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 and spending money on it. Based on the research,
people
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 without the
uniform
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 are more relaxed and happier than
people
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 who have to wear and buy those
unifroms
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uniforms
 to satisfy customers and their bosses. In
the
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conclusion,
uniforms
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 make
people
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’s appearance more professional and
good looking
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good-looking
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, but
however
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,
it
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they
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makes
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make
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 employees and employers less attentive to
work
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due to
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 unfitted and costly
uniforms
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.

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content
Make your view clear at the start and keep it to the end.
coherence
Use link words to show links between ideas.
content
Give real examples from life to show your point.
structure
Keep one main idea in each paragraph and in each sentence.
language
Fix grammar and spell words you use, and avoid repeats.
content
The essay talks on both sides of the issue.
structure
There is an intro and a conclusion.
content
Some clear points about trust and cost.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unity
  • team spirit
  • dress code
  • professional appearance
  • confidence
  • clients
  • brand identity
  • recognizable
  • individuality
  • personal expression
  • uncomfortable
  • impractical
  • financial burden
  • resistance
  • dissatisfaction
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