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In some countries, health care and education are only partially funded by the government. Which do you think is better in terms of quality: free public healthcare and education or privately paid health care and education?

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People need some services which provide them to sustain their life programmatically,
such
 as,
healt
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
heath
halt
 services, education services and accommodation services;
however
, the way of the provision public services
depends
Suggestion
depend
 on governments’ methods and conceptions. Most of the services are supplied by the governments in exchange for high cost
taxes which
Accept comma addition
taxes, which
 are collected legally and regularly from the society. But there are vast governments don’t provide the public services
nevertheless
. In the
first
 instance, both ways of the obtaining the
community
 services
has
Suggestion
have
 different perspectives of positive and negative effects. At
first
 sight, getting services supported by the governments may disappoint people; because, people want to obtain well services when they pay their half of salaries as a tax;
otherwise
, they will be paying private
health
 insurances contemporaneously due to deprivation of adequate
community
 services. Most of the people are suffering about the
in convenient
not suited to your comfort, purpose or needs
inconvenient
healt
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
 services which are provided by the governments. According to human rights, people have a right to get
health
 services while they are paying tax;
however
, the rights don’t motion about the standardising of the
health
 services;
therefore
, people end themselves up waiting long lines and discussing employee of the service at hospitals.
On the other hand
, private
community
 services which are popular in countries where patriots should arrange the services by themselves, necessitate particular status to get the supplies,
for instance
, money; so that, the services can be gathered by the wealthy people;
otherwise
, they should spend their whole money for either
health
 service or education service; for that reason, people cannot dub the provisions as a
community
services
Suggestion
service
 as well as government supplies, but it can be called as a trade.
Consequently
, people don’t anticipate
to get
Suggestion
getting
 impeccable
community
 services, but they expect to get adequate services without
high costs
Suggestion
the high costs
 and according to me there should be implemented rules which restrict discrimination between wealthy people and poor people;
therefore
, the poorest society and wealthiest
community
 should get same services; so that, the services can be advanced with
this
 way.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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